Authors
Note
The last
paragraph in Chapter Seven highlighted one moment as “a glimpse for the window
was instantly thrust down”. Mr. Utterson and Enfield caught themselves a
glimpse of Hyde somewhere within the features of Jeykll. At this point, there
was no possibility of innocence anymore. They finally realized that being a
part of the will and Jeykll and now the dangers of Hyde was all a very cynical
path they were leading themselves down. My very short, completely fictional creative piece I wrote
expands the concept of these men realizing the evil they were now a part of and
would always have to be from then on out.
And
now he is yelling. He never yells. This is not even his voice; his voice is
soft, respectful, fake at times almost. Now his eyes are wide, he allows his
typically simple, self conscious face to a distorted mess of emotions. He never
does this is front of me, ever. There has to be something better, I do not find
joy here: My body shudders from the cold welcoming his presence generates; my
stomach wrings our like a soaking wet towel never releasing its grip; voices
scream back and forth from opposing sides of my brain- “You are so happy some of the time; happier than
you’ve ever been”, “Why are you still here, you’re miserable.”
A relationship of excitement and
anticipation has intoxicated itself into a tumbling, crumbling array of unspoken
words, stories, and secrets. Never again will my eyes light up with joy despite
the situation, for now I see the darkness on the other side. Never again will I
jump up and down with a sparkle in my eye like a little kid on Christmas morning
running downstairs when I see his face; that tingle through my body has been
replaced with shivers down my spine. Those tears of joy fogging my vision flushed
away with a waterfall of desperation and uncertainty. The element of surprise
had been demolished- hook line and sinker; the queasy feeling that lingers in
the pit of your stomach you feel when you know a secret you are not supposed to
know- that feeling. That moment when your little sibling tells you what is
wrapped under the tree for you, and no matter how hard you try to forget or
attempt to express that excited emotion when it is truly reveled, you cannot.
Your reaction is written all over your misplaced, deformed assortment of the
features on your face. This gentle, carefree soul my mind used to chase after
is now haunting me from the inside out, and there is no way out. An assurance
of his evil overthrew everything my brain once believed as his voice truly
began to make my bones shake and my entire body tremble itself to a feeling somewhere
between sick and numb- and I knew I could not leave. There is no way that
leaving could be a possibility, he would never allow it. God forgive me, for I
know I am not only unhappy, I am negatively enthralled in a life my heart can
no longer live in.
This was a great creative piece. You clearly explained the character's emotions, which was excellent. You had great voice in this piece. I was a little confused in some parts towards the end, maybe adding a bit more detail would fix that. Overall, you did a good job at demonstrating how they accepted evil inside them.
ReplyDeleteThe story line was a great way to explain the acceptance of the evil with in them. And I agree with Joanie where there were a few parts in the end that seemed confusing, but otherwise a well written creative piece!
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